Tuesday, March 9, 2010

Believe Essay Draft

Perfect
There is one word many people around the word use that has a lot of different meanings to it. That word is “Perfect”. Does it mean to win everything? Does it mean not having any faults? What does the word perfect mean? Coaches use the word, the news paper use the word. Everyone uses the word. But do these people really know what it means? But can any person or any team really be “Perfect?”

A coach once talked to me about having the “perfect season” where you win every game. To beat every team you play, to win the state championship in the end. If you think about it there is really no “perfect season”. Yeah you can win every game; you can go 162-0. You can go 200-0. But how does that make it perfect? How does winning all your games make you the perfect team? “Well obviously they won every game so how does that make them not perfect?” Yeah they won but how did they win? Was every game played, played to perfection? Was every pass thrown or every pitch thrown perfect? Did the team play the entire game, the entire season played without fault?

“This is the year” my coach told me. He told me that if I wanted to be a state champion this is the team and this is the year we can do it. He asked me as well as the rest of the team if we could be perfect. So this got me to think…”What is a perfect person?” “Can anyone ever be perfect?” Then the other day my father and I had a talk about how some guys on the team have big egos and how they think that they’re good enough. But then he told me that in baseball you’re never good enough. You can never be a perfect baseball player. There is always room for improvement. You can always get better.

I also hear the saying to “stride for perfection”. How can someone “stride for perfection?”What does that really mean? Personally I think it means to do the best you got. You can’t stride for something that’s not there. Perfection is a term used for people to get motivated to work hard. But in reality there is no perfect person. There isn’t that perfect team or perfect person that will do everything the right way or do everything without screwing up once or twice. So I think the saying should be altered to “stride for greatness.”

The 2009 -2010 for a high school football team from Hawaii had its best season in school history going undefeated throughout regular season and later winning the OIA White division championship. Everyone was so happy calling it the “perfect season”. But was it really perfect? Was every win and every play perfect? Not to take anything away from the team they did a great job but how can they call it perfect when they had many faults? How many overtime wins and how many missed opportunities did the team have to take the lead over several teams they played? So what made this season so special that everyone was to brag about this school having a perfect season?

Look at all these professional athletes. Mark Maguire, Alex Rodriguez, Michael Vick, These are all great athletes at the sports they play but they all had faults in their lives. Maguire and Rodriguez two of the greatest baseball players of all time both found guilty of using steroids. Michal Vick one of the best quarterbacks in the NFL sent to imprisonment and suspension for dog fighting. This shows that even some of the greatest athletes in the world aren’t perfect. Everyone has faults even professionals.

You can look at it either way, perfect on paper or perfect in action but in reality there is no such thing as being perfect. No matter who you are what team you play for, you can never be perfect. There is always room for improvement in anything you do. You will go out through your life hearing these things about being perfect. But you always have to ask yourself for your own perspective. What is being “perfect?”

2 comments:

  1. Hey Austin!

    Good Job! I love the topic you picked and the samples that you used were good examples. Starting with teams and then using actually people. The flow of your essay is well put. Starting with what you think perfect is down to actual examples. There isn't much to fix, other then just some misspelling and punctuation marks. Other then that, well done! Keep It Up!

    ReplyDelete
  2. Hi Austin,
    Again, thoughtful job on this essay. I like the way you move from athletics to perfection in life and then connect back to great athletes who lacked perfection in their personal lives.
    I would delete some of the paragraphs, partly because you have a 500 word limit for the NPR submission, but also because they kind of repeat what you've said earlier. I would delete paragraph 4 and 5. You've already made the point about how difficult it is to attain "perfection" so you don't really need the paragraph on "strive for perfection" (and btw, the correct word in the phrase is "strive"). And, since you focus on your own baseball experiences, I don't think you need the football example. Instead, go to the paragraph on the famous athletes and how they fell short of perfection. Then end with your "I believe" statement. And, I would use the phrase "I believe" in your conclusion, instead of going back to the "What is perfect" question...because you've kind of arrived at an answer, yes?
    Let me know if you have questions.
    mrs s

    ReplyDelete